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January 9, 2013
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Be A Critic Volume 6

Wed Jan 9, 2013, 10:24 AM


The Color Yellow.
I have never created something out of nothing.
Really, it's not that.
Something from nothing is something that is impossible. Conservation of mass. Conservation of energy. Never created, never destroyed: merely transferred.
So really, I've never made Art—something out of nothing is something I've heard a lot.
Renown Artist John Doe creates fantastical images on pure blank canvases in a true work of magic, bringing beauty and emotion from where there was once nothingness—
It's rearranging colors.
-The color was in the tube. Now it is on the page, mixed with water and hair particles.
-The letters on the page are the same dots on the computer screen as always. Their light refraction just changed, creating the appearance of color.
-Yellow is red and green side by side on my computer screen: an optical illusion; a trick of the light.
And I play Scary Monsters and Nice Sprites on loop  and sound makes 3D ripples in the air. There's sound and friction and heat.
Dear Betty,
(letters collected by an anonymous chronicler, sent over a duration of two years, beginning shortly before and continuing through the the twelfth border war between the kingdoms of Yettobenamèd and Altern, and ending half a year following the close of the war shortly after the crippling of Crown Prince James III)  
Dear Betty,
It's only been a few weeks but I really miss you already. It's much colder in the north and I don't think I've ever been this cold before, but Mr. Renault says that we're still in the north, even though we've been traveling south. I don't know what he means, exactly, since I thought what wasn't north was the south, but he knows more than me so I think just nodding and agreeing is probably the best idea. He's a very nice man, I think, but he's very scary sometimes too.
We've made it out of the desert. It's been a while since we were out of the desert, actually. I don't think I've ever seen so much green in one place. I pressed some of the flowers I found and s

The Challenge

:bulletblack: Pick at least one of the thumbs above*
:bulletblack: Read it
:bulletblack: Comment or Critique it**
:bulletblack: Leave a comment on THIS journal with the following:
:bulletwhite: A link to your comment on the deviation you chose***
:bulletwhite: A link to one of your deviations you'd like to have feedback on

:bulletblack: Wait for the results to come out!

Start Date: NOW!

End Date: January 22, 2013 @ 11:59PM EST

The Prizes

:bulletblack: One random winner will receive a comment/critique from me.
:bulletblack: A second random winner will receive 50:points:

Winners from Volume 5

:bulletblack: OfOneSoul won a comment/critique from me. 
:bulletblack: ReallyLostMyMind won 50:points:

Interested in being Featured?

Awesome! It's real simple to sign up.  Just drop me a note with the thumbcodes to three of your deviations you'd like to receive feedback on.  Prose, poetry, scripts, anything!  But, before you send me the note, please make sure that the deviations you're choosing have a couple questions in the author's comments.  It's much easier to give feedback on something if you know what the author isn't sure about.

*Commenting/critiquing on more than one of the deviations will increase your odds of winning. There is a strict limit of three entries per deviant.
**A Comment is a few lines, possibly a paragraph, about your opinion of the story.  It usually includes something that you really liked and should include at least one thing that can be improved.  A Critique is many paragraphs about the deviation and will include both personal opinion as well as correction to technical errors.
***To get a link to your comment, once you've submitted it, click on the time stamp.

Bi-Weekly Critiquing Challenge : Featuring ~BeaBae this week.
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thecrazymagnet Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013   Writer
I wrote a comment on The Colour Yellow: [link]

I would love feedback on [link] because it's definitely outside my comfort zone!
GrimFace242 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013   Writer
Thank you. You've been entered in the prize drawing.
TheFS Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I've written a critique for Stumbline. If I get time, I'll try and do another if I can =D

I'd love to receive some feed back on [link].
GrimFace242 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013   Writer

Thank you for participating! You've been added to the list for prizes. And there's still a week til the deadline!
TheFS Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
A week eh? Plenty of time for some more in-depth critiquing then! =D
GrimFace242 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013   Writer

Love it!
7Demented Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Done. Stumbline was interesting, although I wish it had more info. Oh well.

Comment: [link]

Here's the first chapter of my series: [link]

GrimFace242 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013   Writer
Thank you for participating! You've been entered into the prize drawing. Keep an eye out next week to see if you've won.
OfOneSoul Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yay for winning FEEDBACK! :iconlachoirplz:
GrimFace242 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013   Writer
:la: I'm a little behind at the moment. :ashamed:
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