=Keko-Meko

WreckageHe stole my virginity, put it in a box. Tied it with a slimy bow,
one that fastens and locks. Threw it in the fire, watched it sizzle
and burn. Started to take my value, burned it taking turns.

He trapped me in leather, smothered me till I died. Threw my body
in the trash, never even cried. Left me there to rot, left me
for the rats. Skin pallid, limbs limp, eyes as black as bats.

He left then, and somehow I returned. Crawled through the wreckage,
void of all concern. Eyes were black and lips were cracked. I
wandered like a lifeless doll, feeling I'd been smacked.

He never returned, never said sorry. Left me in the dark at the
bottom of a ChildChild, child, little child,
insulted forever, and forever wild.

Today you'll break, and tomorrow you'll fall,
and my name you'll call and call.

You'll ask for me now, now and again,
sometimes in voice and others with pen.

You're not much better, you never were,
yet you talked with a condescending purr.

Life would bite you with merciless venom,
ripping through your heart of denim.

Spewing hatred to and fro,
you make yourself a pitiful foe.

Child, child, wasted child,
insulting forever and forever wild.

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